We have spent the past weeks learning the parts of an effective paragraph, and putting them in to practice. With the new year approaching, we based our paragraphs on our dreams and the goals we will fulfill in order to make our dreams a reality.
- Publish your completed paragraphs below using the final versions to ensure you have correct English spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
- Respond to your classmates using encouraging words of advice!
- Check the blog again after publishing and respond to your friends.
- I look forward to reading your posts and continued interactions.
The idea of fulfilling my dream of by a veterinian is my life,and the one that gives me great joy. The posibility is to work hard to save money,and pay the four year in order yo ontain the dregree of Doctor of veterinarian. The firt step, í will go to school,and learn english well because ir is necessary por comunicating with the people,and there will be more opportunites knowing more lenguages. The second step, í will go to callege yo learn everything í need to be a veterinarian,and learn more about the veterinary fields. The third step, i will get a license to be able to work,and put into practice everything i learn. The next, í will go to the zoo yo study the animal life más learn more about its need. Because í would like to know more to help them,and í love the al the animals. Finally, í will find a job, and get ready to work,and under take everything learned in the veterinary field yo help animals and their masters.🐵🦍🐶🐺🦊🦁🐯🐴🦌🐮🐑🐏🐷
ReplyDeleteI like your dream,I hope your dream come true.
DeleteGood job ! :)
DeleteYou did a beautiful job sequencing your essay. What a wonderful dream! The animals and their masters will be very lucky to benefit from your skills and knowledge. I think your phone may have autocorected some of your writing into Spanish. I know your final paper copy was edited perfectly, so be sure to consider changing the langauge on your phone next time before posting. Wonderful work!
Deletemy goal is buy a house, I will work hard to save money and buy a house because I live in a rental house I will need to find the place and town I will like to live in freeport because is a quiet town, I will need to find the architect that build the house that I want,I will like to have to have a small house because I only have four members in my family,I will need four bedrooms one for me and my husband and two for the kids and one extra room when somebody visits me.i will like to paint the house a blue color because is my favorite color I will buy furniture including dresser,sofa,dining room and some things for the kitchen and design my house.i will like to live in a beautiful house.
ReplyDeleteNice work ! :)
DeleteYour dream home sounds beautiful! You have a well thought out essay; one that considers the planning and design necessary to construct a home. Excellent work! Take a look back at your paper copy and don't forget to place your periods accordingly to signal the end of a sentence.
DeleteTrio in Colombia
ReplyDeleteThis year we plan to go on exciting trip. We will need to save enough money for our tour. First, we will find a beautiful and interesting places to visit Colombia. Next, we will make a list of the kinds of transport that is the cheapest. We will go in the summer time because it is perfect weather to relax and sightsee. We plan to stay for two weeks. We will spend time on the beach, at clubs, meeting people and try new dishes. It was great there!! We are going back to this wonderful place in next year.
Interesting, I hope you enjoy the trip
DeleteAre you ready for the trip? 🙂
DeleteAneta, what an exciting trip! You did wonderful work using the future tense (will). Remember to look at the last edits before publishing. I saw a few grammar errors which I remember we corrected. Keep up the great work.
Delete:: BE A SYSTEMS ENGINEER IN THE UNITED STATES ::
ReplyDeleteI want to be a systems engineer in the US UU As it I was in my country but, to do it, I have to do a lot. First, I will save money to pay for tests and college. Next, I will study English to understand everything I need and participate in society. Then, I will take the GED test to get a high school diploma that allows me to go to college. Next, I will take the TOEFL test; A more necessary test to test and improve my English skills. Then, I will go to the university to learn everything I need and work as a systems engineer in this country.
Finally, I will look for a good job and work hard to be a useful person and then, over time, I will be ready to go for other dreams in my life.
I will never give up!
Great job Henry
DeleteI like your dream Henry. You did a great job.
DeleteGreat job putting your "voice" (personality) into your writing, Henry. Your conclusion made me smile. When you use ; there is no need to capitalize the letter which follows. Your advanced vocabulary made this interesting to read.
DeleteGreat job !
ReplyDeleteMy dream is I will buy a house. I will live with my whole family. The first step is I will save money and organize everything I need I need. I will stay in my job because the payment is good.after I will go to an financial agent and take information and see if I quality .I if qualify go to the real state and find the right house when find the house is my dreams but it.
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DeleteWhat a beautiful dream! You worked hard to research all of the necessary steps to buying a house. When typing, be sure to put a space between the period (.) and first letter of the next sentence to ensure it is capitalized. Keep up the great work!
DeleteMy goals for the following years are; To be a plumber, because I already know a little bit about that job. Moreover, I will study harder to take the GED, because that's how I can easily communicate with people. After that my dream is to have my own plumbing company, and employ my brothers because they live far away and if I employ to them they can come to live closer to me. This is what I want to achieve in the future.
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DeleteNice job, Adan! I hope your family will be able to live and work together in the future. You did a great job organizing your goals. In English, we don't need to use a comma before "because."
DeleteThanks
ReplyDeleteThanks teacher, I'll work on it.
ReplyDeleteI'm sure you have a colored pen for that!
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